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crowleyisamuff
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 28, 2010 4:14 am    Post subject: Feed Your Idiot Reply with quote

Feed Your Idiot

you only feel free cos someone told you to
your clothes stink of new shoes
your trying too hard
i talk cos i want to not cos i need to

no ones ever truly free
always begging for somthing new
someone to come to
someone to need

feed your idiot
hanging on to converstation
like gold
sticking to them
like glue

week in week out
tune in drop out
haha
your never going to be fee
begging please
screaming please

someone to come to
someone to need
come on now say please
just say the magic word

feed your idiot
hanging on to destruction
cos youve been sold
second hand words
dont lie to me i heard you
try and pass them on
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 28, 2010 4:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like this.
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SKC Willie
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 28, 2010 6:19 am    Post subject: Re: Feed Your Idiot Reply with quote

crowleyisamuff wrote:
Feed Your Idiot

week in week out
tune in drop out
haha
your never going to be free
begging please
screaming please

someone to come to
someone to need
come on now say please
just say the magic word



I think this poem would be improved a ton if you fixed your basic grammar and if you changed two of the stanzas to this


week in; week out
tune in; drop out
haha
ha
you're never going to be fee
begging please
screaming please

someone to come to
someone to need
come on now say please
just say the word
the magic word
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